Chava, I'm no poetry expert, and so this is just personal opinion and preference: I would cut the archaic language. I like this one, archaic language, or not - especially the the last two lines of the last stanza.
Most of my poems don't have it (do they?), I guess I was just in a "romantic" mood that night. :) Thanks!
Not so hard to fix, seems to me.
Chava, I'm no poetry expert, and so this is just personal opinion and preference: I would cut the archaic language.
ReplyDeleteI like this one, archaic language, or not - especially the the last two lines of the last stanza.
Most of my poems don't have it (do they?), I guess I was just in a "romantic" mood that night. :) Thanks!
DeleteNot so hard to fix, seems to me.
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